I tried putting the story in the body of the post a few times but it hangs forever when submitting, I think there may be a character processing limit. Trying it this way to see if I can post it in the comments instead.
I like it. Only thing I would change is ending it at "I looked at you and felt a familiar cold. I thought you should know.”
How long have you been writing for? What inspired you to write this?
I’ve only been a casual writer on and of for a few years, when I decided it would be fun to use as a creative outlet. I like to find a scenario or setting that would creep me out and build a narrative around it that hasn’t (hopefully) been done a million times. This one was my take on a ghost story without the usual stuff like haunted houses, poltergeists, possession, etc., and was my first story getting started.
In regards to being too long for the description, perhaps you could paste the text in https://privatebin.net/ or similar.